LOVING this story. It's unbelievably satisfying to have so many choices to dictate the tone of the player character. I like adapting one of my more harsh/cold OCs into games like this and rarely do they have so many options to accommodate her personality!!
Really beautiful writing, fascinating worldbuilding, and overall game. Very intriguing plot. Can't wait for chapter 2!!
Hi Addered! I am so glad that you feel that you have many options for that kind of character! I feel that such a character has amazing potential for the kind of story I want to tell; exploring the different personalities of MC sprung from how they responded to their circumstances growing up has been immensely satisfying. I hope to continue to accommodate for them!
Hi Aiedaeil! My game personally will never be put up for a price, so please be assured. However, the vast majority of other authors with the same medium will and have monetized their stories upon completion, to success. Thank you so much for your interest again! ♥️
I was looking for good stories to read on itch.io, and I finally found one!
This story not only had amazing imagery, but finally I found a story with more diverse choices! No more 'I'm sad' 'I'm mad' 'I don't answer' nonsense, this story even has 'I'm mad but i'ma joke about it' and it's amazing!
This story is a work of art, and I can't wait too see more!
I do have a quick comment that the 'X' button when you look at something is like right at the end of the screen, I wish there was some padding around it.
I also wish when the setting is picked to choose genders as I go, I wish the default selected was the intended gender, instead of always being 'they,' I feel this would allow us to keep it faithful to the intent but allow us to change some things around as we please.
Also sometimes the OpenDyslexic font doesn't work properly, and I have to reload the page to fix it.
Hi Goose, thanks so much for the feedback!! I'm glad you liked the diversity in the choices <3 I wasn't sure if it was going overboard to have such choices; I wish there was a way to accommodate a wide range of responses without filling the screen with links! Alas, it'd feel too gamey if the choices were in a dropdown box of all things. :)
I am sorry about the X button! A lot of styling for the game was done when I was still quite amateurish with Twine, so I will look out for that <3
Secondly, I had initially written so that the canon language did not actually have any pronouns besides "they/them"... until I realized that would then defeat the purpose of selecting your pronouns! As cool as it would have been, it came with it a slew of issues. I would say "they/them" is the closest to intent. :) Before adding the gender variables, I refer to all of them simply by they/them in writing!
Lastly, sorry for the font issue! I think I have a clue why that is, which is related to why font sizes initially didn't work great at first either :S so I will also investigate that further! Thank you so much for letting me know <3
Once again, thanks again for considering everything and taking the time to let me know your thoughts. I promise it is immensely helpful, and I strive to incorporate them ♥️♥️
Hey! I really enjoyed this story, and can't wait to see where you take this!
I get the pronouns thing, that makes sense! Choosing pronouns in writing is challenging to say the least, and I am just glad to see representation with xe/xem and ey/em pronouns, as well as fully customizable pronouns sheet! It really shows that you care and support your fans, and it allows for more diversity between stories!
I'm not [diagnosed] dyslexic, so I can't know for sure, but I do know reading is difficult, but the font issue wasn't a huge inconvenience, because of how easy it was to fix ( I just pressed refresh XD ).
I really loved the end of the chapter, that twist was incredible, and really shows a layer of depth to the story that many writers don't incorporate until later in the story, and shows you care about the context and emotion behind the scenes!
Overall, this story was beautifully (took me 4 tries before I spelled that right) crafted and incredibly immersive, and I loved every moment of it! Keep up the amazing work!
On the note of pronouns/language since you bring up the canon language perhaps only having 'they', I spent a while working on a more gender inclusive language a while back and came up with a neat idea. Read if you wanna (its long, sorry).
The basic idea takes the concept of keigo - literally translated to respectful language, it's the Japanese grammatical structure for adding respect/formality. The language would have several different levels of formality, for the purposes of pronouns we only really need 2 however so I'll only go into the 2 we need.
First, the "standard" formality. This is the formality you would use with strangers, coworkers, bosses, etc. In a more fleshed out language there might be more formalities above this, but they all would treat pronouns essentially the same as the standard. All pronouns in the standard formality are agender. The closest English translation would probably be they/them although that doesn't convey the true absence of gender that standard formality has. It is simply nongendered.
Second, we have the "familiar" formality. This is the formality you would use for close friends, family, etc. In this formality you do have a number of explicitly gendered pronouns, ranging from the standard masculine/feminine, to various neutral/nongendered pronouns, to even perhaps a number of different "gradient" pronouns for different mixes of gender identity. And finally of course someone can always choose to retain the truly genderless pronouns of standard formality should they prefer a more truly "agender" option.
The idea is that when speaking to strangers - and in situations where you need to be respectful and formal - gender is entirely absent. Thus there is not really a risk of misgendering a stranger without learning their preferred pronouns. Then when two people become close enough, they will switch to their familiar pronouns and thus affirm each other through their language as a sign of their closeness.
Since exchanging familiar pronouns is baked into the structure of the language, it becomes a natural part of introducing oneself. An English approximate would be like introducing yourself as "X, familiarly Y - xe/xer" or even simplified to "X, Y - xe" where X is one's family name/formal name/title and Y is one's personal name. For my MC it would be like introducing her as "The Eye, Lyria - she". It also implies some rude, culturally significant ways to introduce oneself like only introducing their formal title without their familiar pronouns and name thus implying that they do not intend to let you get close to them.
This makes a language that makes no default assumptions about a stranger's gender, but still retains gender expression and affirmation through language. Furthermore I think it canonizes gender affirmation as something more intimate and friendly, a sign of respect and friendship.
Sorry if that was a bit long and rambly but I am a language nerd, couldn't pass up the opportunity to talk about pronouns and gender inclusivity in fictional languages. Hope it was an interesting read at least.
That was a FASCINATING read, I am so grateful!! I wanted to hearken back to my own native tongue because all its pronouns are entirely neutral, only that we add an extra word in our sentences to denote politeness or formality.
Knowing this, I think I can make it canon! ❤️ My one sadness is that some stories or IFs automatically already know the neopronouns of the MC without asking. I think it's great that they already include them, and there is no harm in that at all! But I think it would make it more real this way.
So I can picture the MC and a new character introducing themselves and using gender neutral pronouns until they've become familiar or simply ask the other to refer to them properly if they dislike being formal or being referred to by anything else. Great!
Thank you so much -- this is a great compromise to allowing flexibility in gender expression for the protagonist, and yet also incorporating the neutrality in the language that I intended! You have singlehandedly saved the language. Thank you, Hexling! ❤️
I loved it. Absolutely loved it. One of the small portion of games I actually really read!! Didn't regret a single moment of the game from download to impressed while closing it to check the comments at the end. Can't wait for Ch.2!! Need more like dis
Thank you so much ratlover!!! 🥺🥺♥️♥️ I also have a hard time really reading, so it is such a high honor to know you gave your attention to it. Thank you so much for your kind words :)
Hi PlayCharacter!! I keep forgetting to write explicitly that it's a demo and misleading other people, since I thought marking it as in development was enough -- I am a fool (I just now edited the game page)! Thank you so much for checking it out anyway, and I hope to bring you the next chapter so soon! Thank you so so much for dropping a comment as well! 💓
Just finished and I love it so much! I forgot this was a demo and got so immersed that I was shooked when I reached the end 🗣️ Also, I want to say more but I fear it will only end up in incomprehensible keyboard smash gushing so 🕴️
Thank you and I'll be looking forward for the next chapter! Oh, and happy new year!
Hi cocorunchz, thanks so much for dropping a comment!! 🥺🥺💓💓 I am so happy that it ended up being immersive, and I completely welcome the keyboard smashing!! And happy happy New Year to you too 💕 thank you so much again!
I played through this last night and I really enjoyed it! The setting has a fantastic atmosphere that's beautiful and slightly eerie, and I'm intrigued by the characters! I'm excited about this, thank you for making it!
Oh no! I will have to investigate that ASAP -- it used to lead to an online demo for the macro, but it seems I can't find it online anymore. Thanks for calling it to my attention!!
I really enjoyed the Demo + Chp 1. Very intriguing. Clever integration of character creation & choosing the identity of some of the characters. I assume we're waiting for chp 2, and not that I just don't know where to find it?
Haha, yes, Chapter 2 is not out yet! I forgot some people who come across the game don't come from Tumblr, so they may be unaware of how far the demo goes! Either way, thank you so much!! I always prefer the customization of the character to be integrated into the story, rather than thrown at you from the beginning! ❤️❤️
the dialogue and description is so good, it has me speechless? ??? i love the premise and the navigation between the story and the different branches and the layouts are gorgeous?? i'm so looking forward to more! it's been a while since i've been able to immerse myself into a character.
This game is absolutely FIRE!!! Words are not enough to describe the just how much I adore this already!! Will definitely be following along and cannot wait for what else u have in store, its already so promising!!!
AAAA your enthusiasm is so infectious, thank you so so much for taking the time just to let me know your excitement! It makes me excited just to write it knowing someone like you will be following it!! Thank you so much again ImSooprCereal, you're the sweetest! 💕💕
This entire story is absolutely beautiful. I love all of the characters, the writing style is fantastic, and the MC customization is actually so freeing. Thank you for making this, I enjoyed every single word of it!
!!!! Thank you so much picklenugget1, that is so gratifying and awesome to hear. Ironically, those are all the things I feared about the story, so I'm so stoked to hear you liek them!! ;A; Again, thank you so much for leaving a comment, that means the world to me!!
Hina, I'm so glad you think so!! <3 I love stat-heavy games, but I think I always get bogged down trying to maximize them. I even go so far as to try to "maximize" my relationship points with characters that I completely throw roleplaying out the window! I hope you won't have to feel this way in the future. Thanks so much again for taking the time to comment something lovely :)
WHOAGH WHAT THIS IS SO COOL ACTUALLY I LOVE IT SHAKES AND FALLS OVER??? WHAT!! I ADORE THE CHARACTERS AND THE WORLDBUILDING SO FAR THE CONCEPT MAKES ME FEEL SO /POS!
KAKDKS your enthusiasm is AAA 😭💕 thank you so much Kk_sys, I'm so glad the characters and the story inspired positive feelings, as it does in me! I've chosen some of my favorite aesthetics to incorporate into the game!
Again, thank you thank you for your excitement!! 🫂💕💕
That's exactly how MC feels like to me, vague and yet sharp like so much of the story's own setting! I'm so happy you loved the story and characterization, as well as the art ❤️❤️ it is the culmination of so many people's kindness!
I'm so so happy you liked it, and thank you so much for your rating and comment. You've made me week much lighter and better Cibilka 💕
You're so sweet Osty-kun!! 🥺 Thank you so much for your high praise and if you ever find the energy to go on that long review... I'd love to hear it someday ❤️
Nevertheless, in spite of everything, you took the time and energy to comment and I'm extremely grateful. Thank you so much for reading 💖💕
Really enjoyed this game a lot. The writing, the interactions between the characters and how the MC really seemed to be molded based on the choices really made this a wonderful and immersive experience. I really can't wait to experience more.
I'm so glad you feel that way GameAg 🥺💕 I'm still figuring it all out, but I truly want the game to be reactive to your choices and the character interactions to feel complex! It's probably not so apparent in Chapter 1, but I hope to improve on it to be able to deserve your praise 💖💖 thank you so much again!
Waaa thank you for the high praise, TrotskyBoi!!! That means so much to me 🥹💖💕 and I've been waiting forever for someone to comment on it, I can't believe everyone just took it in stride! Once again, thank you so much 😭😭🫶
Really enjoyed this so far. My MC Eilam, which I chose for its meaning "forever" or "eternal", is a kind but reserved God with a slight bitter take on life. He's curious and tends to fail to adhere to social graces when his curiosity gets to him, as he has the gift of way to much knowledge and perception. (being Everlasting and Universal Eye) He has black hair with a blue streak in it, violet eyes, fair skin, and wears a style of clothes that no other being mortal or immortal wears. (and lots of black and dark blues and silvers in my mind) He never changes his appearance either, preferring to be exactly as described.
Though he's friendly and playful to those friendly to him, he's also quick to anger when disrespected or demeaned as an errand boy. He got mad and ignored Salv for not believing him when he trusted him with his glimpse of the universes pain, but otherwise does value his friendship. He sees the good in Ciocana, knowing what its like to be outcast for what you are. (And they share a spark for being cinical and snarky. poss future besties) But his heart is drawn to Luciel, who he desires to protect and get closer to. He's neutral to Alessi, lacking interaction. (but my guess is if she's mean to him, he'll be mean to her but also merciful in the end as he has a good heart. unless she hurts someone he loves...like his dads or Luciel)
While curious about everything, he's neutral towards humans since he always has to deal with the whiny ones in Lucidia. He does like his job as he enjoys helping others and solving problems, but he does hate dealing with to many people and the difficult ones. In that sense, he takes after Nero in being more of an introvert and needing some recharge time away. He also dislikes being around most of the other gods outside of his fathers, Luciel, Ciocana, and Salv.
Whether he'll side with divinity or mortals will depend on Alessi's reasoning and whether its enough to stir his sympathy, otherwise he's the type to protect those he loves and that currently consists of only a handful...all divine.
blue_shayde, I'm sorry I couldn't get to you any sooner! Things have just been so hectic 🥺
Thank you so much for telling me about your Eilam 💖💖 it still astounds me that people put such incredible thought behind their MCs, and that's just the highest form of love and flattery I can receive!
Ah, Salv 💔 despite caring for Eilam, I think they find it difficult to break away from some of their stubborn beliefs -- or at least, their stubbornness to look away from the truth.
Eliam is incredibly kind to sympathize with Cio, and oh--Luciel!! That would be such a sweet union ❤️ I do suspect Alessi will he very unkind to Eilam... but their mercy will be very surprising!
They most definitely take after Nero, who keeps his affairs away from mortals, and is fiercely loyal and protective to the things and people he cares about!
I think the conflict will then be doubly interesting for Eilam. I wanted there to be a conflict between wanting to stay loyal to your friends and family, and yet having to do that at the cost of potentially wronging the Universe and humanity.
Thank you so much again for telling me❤️❤️ it's incredible valuable to know about other people's MCs so I can tailor and keep in mind what dialogue choices to include to accommodate different personalities!
It's ok. Thanks for your thoughts. I find it hard to really roleplay and get into the mind of a character without having an idea of what my character is going to ultimately be. I'm not the self-insert type, so I love to flesh out a MC that has an initial format that can grow and develop with the story I've put them in. Eilam started out as my idea of a very wise but misunderstood God with a kind heart, who'd probably hang his head and stick to the wall like a typical wallflower. However...as your story went on...he became a bit more proud and his job in the underworld just reminded me of my retail job days. Thus...he now has a bit of that harsh cynical nature you tend to develop when you work retail jobs for to long. (anyone who's worked retail will understand the pain of dealing with idiots and entitled assholes)
I also love the idea of the God of Eternity and the God of Death as a pair. Leave it to a God of Eternity to have zero fear of a God of Death. Even though around Luciel, Eliam becomes less introvert and more simp. (Luciel deserves someone to love and be loved. Not being alone at a table during a feast. I wonder what the child of Death and Eternity would be...... Fate? Destiny? Rebirth? Probably Rebirth. Could be all three.)
And Eliam having this vast library like knowledge in his head, like the personal history recorder of the universe itself. I wanted to make him a fighter because he's definitely the protective type, but Perception and Knowledge were just to perfect for a God of Eternity. Somehow Eliam went from a kicked puppy in my mind to a prissy black cat that will hiss if you poke him the wrong way. But I like it. I'm looking forward to future development
Final thoughts...I totally adore his dads. And from the sounds of it, Alessi and Eliam are going to be like two stubborn cats fighting over floor space. He won't back down from kicking her ass...and seems like neither will she. Thus...I suspect we've got a good ol' fashion rivalry/frienemy relationship in the future here.
Sorry for another rant. I've always loved mythology, so I can get passionate when it comes to this sort of thing. xD
This demo is (pardon my french) absolutely fucking gorgeous. And not just the aesthetics- though the ui is probably some of the prettiest I've seen on twine. The beauty pervades even the text itself; the writing is lyrical and flowing, yet clear and crisp. If I had to use one word to describe the writing style of Uroboros, it would be ethereal. It is dreamlike, as though you're walking through someone else's hazy recollections. Yet, the text always manages to remain sharp and focused, never losing sight of the plot. The writing is always so easy to visualize, at a mere whim bringing in images of decadent halls and the shimmering night sky to the forefront of the readers mind.
And the choices. The sheer depth of choices we have, this early on, makes me squeal with glee and clap my hands with joy. There's such a wide range to choose from, allowing the mc to spring to life fully realized. MC isn't shoveled into an archetype, but instead is allowed to roam the world, feeling out each and every interaction they have. And you're never penalized by the game for choosing the "wrong" option whatsoever. If you want to be mean, be mean. If you want to be kind yet bitter (my MC, thanks for asking) you have the freedom to do so! Any combination under the sun is possible, and the game won't lock you out for having the 'wrong' mc.
And the relationships we can have with the characters also makes me giggle and clap my hands like a toddler in a candy shop. There's no relationship points or values or anything like that; instead, you can craft your relationship with each character as you see fit, letting the game keep track of your attitudes and mannerisms. As another commenter said, there's no need to second guess whether declining a piece of bread will lead to a decreased relationship- this game says, 'fuck that!', and lets you decline the damned bread without losing anything whatsoever to the relationship. You can create actual, meaningful relationships in this game without agonizing over being stuck in Route Lock Hell.
I know that so far I've written what may amount to a whole ass essay, but this wouldn't be complete if I didn't have a whole mini rant about my wonderful little MC, Roselle the Imperishable, The Universal Eye, All Who Lasts Forever. (Whoo writing that was a dozy.) Kindhearted and outgoing, yet tactful and courteous; ever curious and open, yet keeps their secrets close to their chest. Charming, thoughtful, caring- they're a well of contradictions. When they were born, they were bathed in love from the Universe. Yet, after being cast aside by the gods, after being ridiculed and thought of as lesser, they now doubt the Universe's love towards them. It must all be a ruse, because how could this count as love?
They're pretty curious about everything- about how the wind flows, about the way the water laps against the beach, and most of all, about humans. They've studied human anatomy extensively, and was more than a little excited to dance with the humans at the festival! Yet, despite having a job that allows them to speak to humans on the daily, they, well...they hate it. They never let that show though; instead they go about their duties with their head held high, dutiful to their task. They would much rather travel and see the world, but for now they will stay in the afterlife, guiding souls to their destination. What good were they worth outside of this?
Roselle, while they are kind and loving, also has a well of bitterness inside of them that they try not to acknowledge, yet always manages to rise up unbidden. They love their fathers, yet in the same breath loathe the two for bringing them into the world, worthless and then tossed aside. They loathe Salvatore, due to pure jealousy. Salvatore, the miracle, the golden child, the beloved. They always attempt to act civil around her, and know that their loathing isn't justified, yet they loathe anyways.
One of the only deities that is uniformly on their good side, however, is Lucille, above all grateful to xem for giving them a chance when no one else would. Ciocana is amusing, funny and playful, yet also a (potential) friend in the making- outcasts are drawn to other outcasts, after all. And they are definitely looking at Alessi (and may help out with the rebellion. Idk, whichever route proves to be the most chaotic...cackling like a witch rn).
Now as this long winded rant falls to an end, I merely want to re-iterate my thoughts on this game: it's really fucking good. Like, really. Play it, replay it, and bask in the wealth of choices and the beautiful writing. Meanwhile, I will be banging my hands over and over again, waiting for chapter 2. Thank you so much author for making this incredible game!
You have no idea how many times I've read reread your comment. There is nothing more inspiring and beautiful to me than someone who receives your labor of love with so much love, too. Being able to resonate with someone is the impact that I've always dreamed to have, if there's one thing I must do; in a way, that's true eternity.
I'm so glad you could see what I was aiming for with the writing style! Simultaneously hazy, yet clear -- a waking dream, as said in the prologue. I can't even state my ecstasy in at least succeeding convey the way I wish my writing is read, even for just one person!
I've always found that one of the issues I had with IFs is having to play to fit a certain archetype perfectly. Sometimes, it feels like they punish me for responding differently than how I've characterized my MC until that point. That's not something I want to penalize people for, but rather reward -- to give them nuance, and not lock them out of options unless it's jarring or wildly illogical. I'm so happy you're really enjoying the depth of the choices so far, and I hope to continue that trend in the next chapters!!
Of course, another issue I found in other IFs is needing to say the perfect words, the perfect choices to gain the approval of my chosen romantic options. It's difficult to work with, because on one hand, I want to please the characters -- and yet, changing my character to fit the RO also feels like the RO can't love them honestly. This time around, I simply want to acknowledge MCs who agree and MCs whodisagree with them. I also can't help myself, since I love opposites attract!
Thank you so much for telling me about Roselle. Learning about other people's MCs is truly valuable information. It helps give me insight as to what matters to readers and their deities of eternity, and that helps me mold the IF's choices and direction much better to cater to both you guys and myself! I especially hope to cater to MCs with as much nuance as Roselle, who can be sweet and lovely, and yet bitter and jealous (rightfully or not so rightfully).
I can't even begin to explain how emotional this comment made me. Again, there is no higher honor than being seen. I can only hope to show it by hopefully marching your energy, which is why I delayed writing until I feel I could give a response that could do my feelings justice. Even now, it still doesn't feel enough -- and yet it'll have to do. You've singlehandedly forced me to write today, even for just a few minutes, because I desperately want to write the story that you say it is -- that someone could love as much as I do. ❤️❤️
Oh. Em. GEE!!! This game is so. Freaking. COOL!!!! Hellooo, there are GODS in here, like you're playing a literal god. You're useless but you still get to bully dead humans so I enjoyed it. There are also other gods that are Cute like the sunshine god. Have yuo ever seen that teletubbies baby face in the sun, that's what I mentally imagine them to look like (I kno there are drawings showing what they look like but I like to be using my IMAGINATION!!!!) There's also boss mommie god and daddy gods which I much liked. The writing is freaking great it has this whimsical tone which goes with the setting and you really feel like you are a god, but like a useless one. The demo ended in a cliffhanger so I'm a little bit angry thinking of complaining abt that. But it's still so yummy I think I won't and I look forward to reading MORE!!!!
(This was a silly little joke but my love for this game is not. I can't describe the experience of reading it in just words, but believe me when I say that it's well worth it. The whimsical, magical feeling that the writing inspires really helps to paint the world and unique situation you find yourself in as the god of eternity. There is so much freedom given with how you're allowed to interpret this story, to the point where some instances have completely different choices depending on how you've felt about something previously. You wouldn't realize it if you only play through it once, but gems like that just goes to show how much effort the author has put into making this as personal of an experience as possible, despite the fantastical setting. The only complaint I have is that I want more </3)
SDIFGJKLDFG TELETUBBIES BABY FACE?! 😭😭😭 well,. ,, , all the more power to you and your vivid imagination blablabuble,,,,,, don't cook again 🗣️🗣️💯💯🔥🔥
In any case, thank you so much for your compliments 🥺🥺 I know I asked you to do this as a joke, but I'm so glad that you wrote such genuinely nice things for it as well!! I truly write this for you and the others, and I hope that love comes across. The choices I made for this IF are defined by how much I wish this IF to be so personal to the audience and the people I care about.
Thank you so much again for humoring me.......... Carl 💕💕
A staggering amount of personality variations that allows you to cook up the most complex and interesting MCs your little heart could ever dream of. Angry Wet Cat (read: tsundere) options are very much available and readily received by the world within the game, so one can live their tsundere MC dreams to the fullest without having to worry about getting 34785 negative relationship points along the way. MCs intent on being the meanest, most ruthless piece of ice in the general vicinity are also welcomed.
Favorability meters? Relationship points? They don't exist here. Choices actually bounce off of non-MC characters to create interesting relationship dynamics instead of kicking you into Route Lock Jail. Unless you say something that's extremely opposed to their core morals, you're fine. The game won't kick you out for being mean, promise <3 Go wild with the variables. Be free.
And, no. You don't get negative relationship points for refusing a piece of bread. There are no relationship points. The game tracks the attitudes, opinions, and actions you express to the characters and bounces off of that. Refuse that bread. They won't mind. This is a safe space for bread haters. More bread for me, at least 😌🍞✨
— (If I sound a bit unhinged, I'm sorry <//3 this is a personal blurb I wrote for Uroboros while I was working on making actual different collections for my beloved IF games instead of tossing them all into one collection 💀 I figured I should post it here as well.)
Aspen, thank you again for such extensive praise!! 😭😭 I will work even harder to make sure that what you say is fully true in the next upcoming chapters — I want to accommodate even the wettest and angriest cat MC ❤️❤️ there is so much more to people than arbitrary dialogue choices you make and small decisions that largely don't matter in the long run. I've personally struggled so much to always say the right things so that my RO won't hate me, and that's an anxiety I definitely don't hope to encourage in readers for my IF!
I'm really glad you tok the time to recognize that! The SAFEST space for bread haters :) thank you so much for dropping this comment even though it was meant for your collection! (PS I totally checked it out!!)
I absolutely adore this, you do not even understand the extent of how much I love this.
The customization is awesome, being able to choose multiple pronouns & even change forms as we please is just so amazing I adore that.
The complexity of the choices & characters & how its not just superficial stats, which, I enjoy stat based games, but this is refreshing to say the least & it makes everything feel so much more real.
I love being able to choose if my character likes being touched as well, the amount of customization is just awesome.
The setting & little clues we get on the lore & the way it was executed, it all just makes this an amazing experience, even with only one chapter out.
I feel like I will become addicted to this game.
Edit: Before I forget, In profile, after ‘as befits’ rather than showing the pronoun it shows $mc_their
Thank you so much for your kind words!! I am so glad that you enjoyed the level of customization and the choices so much—what you're saying is what I strive to achieve, and while I can't say myself if I deserve your high praise... I'd love to be worthy of it and be confident of saying as much as well someday! ;O;
I will check into that bug, and again, thank you so much!!! This means the absolute world to me <3
saw luciel and immediately had to play this game. and now look where i am. writing fanfiction. oh my god.... ten minutes until i write more luciel fics amen. see you on discord 🫡
(on a different note. i love this game!! first one i've played and it's really fun! :D)
Oh Desatana, hi phobia!! 🥺🥺 I'm glad you like Luciel's portrait so much, and I loved your writing too!!! See you on Discord, and thanks so much for commenting and sending your love! 💕
Your writing is so fantastic. I absolutely love the amount of choices available to us for building our characters, not just superficial appearance choices, but actual personality choices! That feels so rare in IF. I also saw you mentioned you can be on good terms with the characters even if you disagree with them, that made me so happy! I'm always so excited to find a good story with choices and character interactions that don't rely heavily on stats.
🥺🥺🫂💕 Thank you so much for all your kind words, melkhiresa! I get emotional reading your comment because you say exactly what I hope to hear about the IF! You remind me that there are people see and acknowledge the small details, and that truly inspires me to keep holding myself to a high standard. I want to keep putting out work that makes you feel this way! Again, thank you so much for your kindness 🫶✨
😭😭 Thank you so much!! And you are absolutely not crazy at all... I'd love to hear them if you ever want to share them! Thank you so much for enjoying this 💕💕
I think it’s different bc the writing is phenomenal, I felt so immersed and the designs were all so beautiful!! The characters also had so much thought into them, it’s not everyday you find stories like this!I’m so excited to see the rest of the story! I will definitely follow its development!! ❤️
🥹... It feels weird to call you guys fans. I feel honored to be given the chance to be read and known, which is the most wonderful thing to ever happen to an author. Instead, I feel indebted to everyone who's given my story a chance and invested their time and effort into reading it.
Thank you so much for explaining 💕 while I feel I don't deserve such high praise, I trust that you mean it, and that means the world to me. Thank you so so much for giving me your kind words!!
I don't know what to say. Everything about this game is so beautiful. From how the story flows to pretty designs (the art is so PRETTY and the descriptions are so well detailed). I really love the interactions of the MC with the characters, and Its so well written that I want more of it 😭💗 Thank you for making this! Good luck on the upcoming updates.
GreenGummyFrog, you have similarly put me at a loss for words 😭💕 thank you so much for giving this game a try, and for liking the writing and design I worked hard for! I can't tell you how amazing and profound it is to be seen. I hope you will follow the next updates!! 🫶
Beautiful, beautiful game. The visuals, the writing, the characters — so many aspects of this game come together to create an incredibly immersive experience. The amount of variations available for the player are insane, and makes so much room for you to create complex and vivid MCs. 5 stars, 10/10, and I hope new readers will have as much fun as I am!
Aspen, thank you so so much for your kind words, it means the world to me!! 💕💕 I've rewritten this comment a few times, but I can never quite convey my appreciation in any way that expresses the full breadth of it. Even if I can't hope to show it properly, I've been, and am, extremely grateful for all the support you've given me so far. It's truly astounding. Again, thank you so much :)
Cause I'm not sure the best way to contact the creator about the website, I'll do it here. Salvatore's and Luciel's Heart/Personality section is the exact same, looks like Salvatore's was accidently copied straight up from Luciel's.
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LOVING this story. It's unbelievably satisfying to have so many choices to dictate the tone of the player character. I like adapting one of my more harsh/cold OCs into games like this and rarely do they have so many options to accommodate her personality!!
Really beautiful writing, fascinating worldbuilding, and overall game. Very intriguing plot. Can't wait for chapter 2!!
Hi Addered! I am so glad that you feel that you have many options for that kind of character! I feel that such a character has amazing potential for the kind of story I want to tell; exploring the different personalities of MC sprung from how they responded to their circumstances growing up has been immensely satisfying. I hope to continue to accommodate for them!
Thank you so so much for your lovely words ❤️
Cant wait for chapter 2!
Thank you, London!! ❤️❤️ I hope to bring it to you soon!
I love the story line. Your not gonna put this up for money are you? :(
i really enjoy the game and yes money it's deserved but many wouldn't play maybe like a tip thingy? i dunno it's a good game.
Hi Aiedaeil! My game personally will never be put up for a price, so please be assured. However, the vast majority of other authors with the same medium will and have monetized their stories upon completion, to success. Thank you so much for your interest again! ♥️
No worries i love the game! and the art :)
I was looking for good stories to read on itch.io, and I finally found one!
This story not only had amazing imagery, but finally I found a story with more diverse choices! No more 'I'm sad' 'I'm mad' 'I don't answer' nonsense, this story even has 'I'm mad but i'ma joke about it' and it's amazing!
This story is a work of art, and I can't wait too see more!
I do have a quick comment that the 'X' button when you look at something is like right at the end of the screen, I wish there was some padding around it.
I also wish when the setting is picked to choose genders as I go, I wish the default selected was the intended gender, instead of always being 'they,' I feel this would allow us to keep it faithful to the intent but allow us to change some things around as we please.
Also sometimes the OpenDyslexic font doesn't work properly, and I have to reload the page to fix it.
Hi Goose, thanks so much for the feedback!! I'm glad you liked the diversity in the choices <3 I wasn't sure if it was going overboard to have such choices; I wish there was a way to accommodate a wide range of responses without filling the screen with links! Alas, it'd feel too gamey if the choices were in a dropdown box of all things. :)
I am sorry about the X button! A lot of styling for the game was done when I was still quite amateurish with Twine, so I will look out for that <3
Secondly, I had initially written so that the canon language did not actually have any pronouns besides "they/them"... until I realized that would then defeat the purpose of selecting your pronouns! As cool as it would have been, it came with it a slew of issues. I would say "they/them" is the closest to intent. :) Before adding the gender variables, I refer to all of them simply by they/them in writing!
Lastly, sorry for the font issue! I think I have a clue why that is, which is related to why font sizes initially didn't work great at first either :S so I will also investigate that further! Thank you so much for letting me know <3
Once again, thanks again for considering everything and taking the time to let me know your thoughts. I promise it is immensely helpful, and I strive to incorporate them ♥️♥️
Hey! I really enjoyed this story, and can't wait to see where you take this!
I get the pronouns thing, that makes sense! Choosing pronouns in writing is challenging to say the least, and I am just glad to see representation with xe/xem and ey/em pronouns, as well as fully customizable pronouns sheet! It really shows that you care and support your fans, and it allows for more diversity between stories!
I'm not [diagnosed] dyslexic, so I can't know for sure, but I do know reading is difficult, but the font issue wasn't a huge inconvenience, because of how easy it was to fix ( I just pressed refresh XD ).
I really loved the end of the chapter, that twist was incredible, and really shows a layer of depth to the story that many writers don't incorporate until later in the story, and shows you care about the context and emotion behind the scenes!
Overall, this story was beautifully (took me 4 tries before I spelled that right) crafted and incredibly immersive, and I loved every moment of it! Keep up the amazing work!
On the note of pronouns/language since you bring up the canon language perhaps only having 'they', I spent a while working on a more gender inclusive language a while back and came up with a neat idea. Read if you wanna (its long, sorry).
The basic idea takes the concept of keigo - literally translated to respectful language, it's the Japanese grammatical structure for adding respect/formality. The language would have several different levels of formality, for the purposes of pronouns we only really need 2 however so I'll only go into the 2 we need.
The idea is that when speaking to strangers - and in situations where you need to be respectful and formal - gender is entirely absent. Thus there is not really a risk of misgendering a stranger without learning their preferred pronouns. Then when two people become close enough, they will switch to their familiar pronouns and thus affirm each other through their language as a sign of their closeness.
Since exchanging familiar pronouns is baked into the structure of the language, it becomes a natural part of introducing oneself. An English approximate would be like introducing yourself as "X, familiarly Y - xe/xer" or even simplified to "X, Y - xe" where X is one's family name/formal name/title and Y is one's personal name. For my MC it would be like introducing her as "The Eye, Lyria - she". It also implies some rude, culturally significant ways to introduce oneself like only introducing their formal title without their familiar pronouns and name thus implying that they do not intend to let you get close to them.
This makes a language that makes no default assumptions about a stranger's gender, but still retains gender expression and affirmation through language. Furthermore I think it canonizes gender affirmation as something more intimate and friendly, a sign of respect and friendship.
Sorry if that was a bit long and rambly but I am a language nerd, couldn't pass up the opportunity to talk about pronouns and gender inclusivity in fictional languages. Hope it was an interesting read at least.
Hi Hexling,
That was a FASCINATING read, I am so grateful!! I wanted to hearken back to my own native tongue because all its pronouns are entirely neutral, only that we add an extra word in our sentences to denote politeness or formality.
Knowing this, I think I can make it canon! ❤️ My one sadness is that some stories or IFs automatically already know the neopronouns of the MC without asking. I think it's great that they already include them, and there is no harm in that at all! But I think it would make it more real this way.
So I can picture the MC and a new character introducing themselves and using gender neutral pronouns until they've become familiar or simply ask the other to refer to them properly if they dislike being formal or being referred to by anything else. Great!
Thank you so much -- this is a great compromise to allowing flexibility in gender expression for the protagonist, and yet also incorporating the neutrality in the language that I intended! You have singlehandedly saved the language. Thank you, Hexling! ❤️
Glad you liked it and it clicked some things into place for you!
I loved it. Absolutely loved it. One of the small portion of games I actually really read!! Didn't regret a single moment of the game from download to impressed while closing it to check the comments at the end. Can't wait for Ch.2!! Need more like dis
Thank you so much ratlover!!! 🥺🥺♥️♥️ I also have a hard time really reading, so it is such a high honor to know you gave your attention to it. Thank you so much for your kind words :)
This game is amazing.
I was so into the game, and realised that it was JUST a demo. Thank you for this game, I'll be waiting for the next chapter with glee and gyrate.
Hi PlayCharacter!! I keep forgetting to write explicitly that it's a demo and misleading other people, since I thought marking it as in development was enough -- I am a fool (I just now edited the game page)! Thank you so much for checking it out anyway, and I hope to bring you the next chapter so soon! Thank you so so much for dropping a comment as well! 💓
Just finished and I love it so much! I forgot this was a demo and got so immersed that I was shooked when I reached the end 🗣️ Also, I want to say more but I fear it will only end up in incomprehensible keyboard smash gushing so 🕴️
Thank you and I'll be looking forward for the next chapter! Oh, and happy new year!
Hi cocorunchz, thanks so much for dropping a comment!! 🥺🥺💓💓 I am so happy that it ended up being immersive, and I completely welcome the keyboard smashing!! And happy happy New Year to you too 💕 thank you so much again!
I played through this last night and I really enjoyed it! The setting has a fantastic atmosphere that's beautiful and slightly eerie, and I'm intrigued by the characters! I'm excited about this, thank you for making it!
Thank you, Leon!! I am so grateful to you for taking the time to read my writing as well 💕💕 it means more to me than you can know!
I know there's only one chapter, but this one is my favorite Interactive! Really looking forward to where it goes! (Ciocana has my heart already)
!!! That's extremely high praise Puufi, thank you so much!! I hope not to disappoint you 🥺💖
i'll be waiting for chap. 2! this was a very well made game <3
Hi astra!! Thank you so much for your sweet comment <3!!!
Hey. The HiEv link in your credits seems to be hacked and leads to a security alert.
Oh no! I will have to investigate that ASAP -- it used to lead to an online demo for the macro, but it seems I can't find it online anymore. Thanks for calling it to my attention!!
I really enjoyed the Demo + Chp 1. Very intriguing. Clever integration of character creation & choosing the identity of some of the characters. I assume we're waiting for chp 2, and not that I just don't know where to find it?
Keep up the good work!
Haha, yes, Chapter 2 is not out yet! I forgot some people who come across the game don't come from Tumblr, so they may be unaware of how far the demo goes! Either way, thank you so much!! I always prefer the customization of the character to be integrated into the story, rather than thrown at you from the beginning! ❤️❤️
Thanks again, Kiljek! 💕
I just want to let you know that we're looking forward to the chapter 2 <3
🥹🥹 thank you ziye ❤️❤️❤️
the dialogue and description is so good, it has me speechless? ??? i love the premise and the navigation between the story and the different branches and the layouts are gorgeous?? i'm so looking forward to more! it's been a while since i've been able to immerse myself into a character.
AAAA thank you so much playerlou!! Your words mean more to me than I can say 🥹 I'm glad you were able to be so immersed!
is it wrong to say that i'm a sucker for ciocana? 😩
Not at all, I am too!
Absolutely not! 💕
Love it so much I cry a alot for the mc D:
🥺🥺 I'm sorry to make you feel this way for the MC!! Hopefully they will earn everyone's respect soon 💕
This game is absolutely FIRE!!! Words are not enough to describe the just how much I adore this already!! Will definitely be following along and cannot wait for what else u have in store, its already so promising!!!
AAAA your enthusiasm is so infectious, thank you so so much for taking the time just to let me know your excitement! It makes me excited just to write it knowing someone like you will be following it!! Thank you so much again ImSooprCereal, you're the sweetest! 💕💕
salvatore i will actually die for you
Salvatore would for you 💕
This entire story is absolutely beautiful. I love all of the characters, the writing style is fantastic, and the MC customization is actually so freeing. Thank you for making this, I enjoyed every single word of it!
!!!! Thank you so much picklenugget1, that is so gratifying and awesome to hear. Ironically, those are all the things I feared about the story, so I'm so stoked to hear you liek them!! ;A; Again, thank you so much for leaving a comment, that means the world to me!!
Wow! I was impressed!! I liked that there were no stats for a change. It really gave me more freedom in choosing from the choices.
Hina, I'm so glad you think so!! <3 I love stat-heavy games, but I think I always get bogged down trying to maximize them. I even go so far as to try to "maximize" my relationship points with characters that I completely throw roleplaying out the window! I hope you won't have to feel this way in the future. Thanks so much again for taking the time to comment something lovely :)
Yes! Yes! I get you a lot! I like stat-heavy games too, but sometimes, I want to mix it up with games like this.
WHOAGH WHAT THIS IS SO COOL ACTUALLY I LOVE IT SHAKES AND FALLS OVER??? WHAT!! I ADORE THE CHARACTERS AND THE WORLDBUILDING SO FAR THE CONCEPT MAKES ME FEEL SO /POS!
KAKDKS your enthusiasm is AAA 😭💕 thank you so much Kk_sys, I'm so glad the characters and the story inspired positive feelings, as it does in me! I've chosen some of my favorite aesthetics to incorporate into the game!
Again, thank you thank you for your excitement!! 🫂💕💕
HOW COULD I NOT BE EXCITED WITH THIS KINDA STUFF ITS SO PRETTY AND FUN GHJDGJDHW
THANK YOU FOR THE GAME!!!
RAGH
That's exactly how MC feels like to me, vague and yet sharp like so much of the story's own setting! I'm so happy you loved the story and characterization, as well as the art ❤️❤️ it is the culmination of so many people's kindness!
I'm so so happy you liked it, and thank you so much for your rating and comment. You've made me week much lighter and better Cibilka 💕
oh man this is so interesting
I'm glad you like, eggsoup!! 🫂💖💕
I could go on a very long review to display my newfound love and affection for this game... Or I could simply say that this a simply divine.
Considering I'm quite lazy, this is divine and I can't wait for more!
You're so sweet Osty-kun!! 🥺 Thank you so much for your high praise and if you ever find the energy to go on that long review... I'd love to hear it someday ❤️
Nevertheless, in spite of everything, you took the time and energy to comment and I'm extremely grateful. Thank you so much for reading 💖💕
i am s0 hooked, i can't wait for more chapters!
Thank you so much Kal, I'm super excited to work on them as well!! I hope you'll like them too <3
I honestly love Rafaele and Nero too much…
Waaa I love them too! <3
THEY’RE SO SWEET!!
Really enjoyed this game a lot. The writing, the interactions between the characters and how the MC really seemed to be molded based on the choices really made this a wonderful and immersive experience. I really can't wait to experience more.
I'm so glad you feel that way GameAg 🥺💕 I'm still figuring it all out, but I truly want the game to be reactive to your choices and the character interactions to feel complex! It's probably not so apparent in Chapter 1, but I hope to improve on it to be able to deserve your praise 💖💖 thank you so much again!
The game is fantastic and super well written, especially like how much meaning each customisation option has. Can't wait for more updates!
But I also have to mention that the default name if you want to make your own is Morbius. Almost fell out of my chair laughing 10/10 would morb again.
Waaa thank you for the high praise, TrotskyBoi!!! That means so much to me 🥹💖💕 and I've been waiting forever for someone to comment on it, I can't believe everyone just took it in stride! Once again, thank you so much 😭😭🫶
Really enjoyed this so far. My MC Eilam, which I chose for its meaning "forever" or "eternal", is a kind but reserved God with a slight bitter take on life. He's curious and tends to fail to adhere to social graces when his curiosity gets to him, as he has the gift of way to much knowledge and perception. (being Everlasting and Universal Eye) He has black hair with a blue streak in it, violet eyes, fair skin, and wears a style of clothes that no other being mortal or immortal wears. (and lots of black and dark blues and silvers in my mind) He never changes his appearance either, preferring to be exactly as described.
Though he's friendly and playful to those friendly to him, he's also quick to anger when disrespected or demeaned as an errand boy. He got mad and ignored Salv for not believing him when he trusted him with his glimpse of the universes pain, but otherwise does value his friendship. He sees the good in Ciocana, knowing what its like to be outcast for what you are. (And they share a spark for being cinical and snarky. poss future besties) But his heart is drawn to Luciel, who he desires to protect and get closer to. He's neutral to Alessi, lacking interaction. (but my guess is if she's mean to him, he'll be mean to her but also merciful in the end as he has a good heart. unless she hurts someone he loves...like his dads or Luciel)
While curious about everything, he's neutral towards humans since he always has to deal with the whiny ones in Lucidia. He does like his job as he enjoys helping others and solving problems, but he does hate dealing with to many people and the difficult ones. In that sense, he takes after Nero in being more of an introvert and needing some recharge time away. He also dislikes being around most of the other gods outside of his fathers, Luciel, Ciocana, and Salv.
Whether he'll side with divinity or mortals will depend on Alessi's reasoning and whether its enough to stir his sympathy, otherwise he's the type to protect those he loves and that currently consists of only a handful...all divine.
blue_shayde, I'm sorry I couldn't get to you any sooner! Things have just been so hectic 🥺
Thank you so much for telling me about your Eilam 💖💖 it still astounds me that people put such incredible thought behind their MCs, and that's just the highest form of love and flattery I can receive!
Ah, Salv 💔 despite caring for Eilam, I think they find it difficult to break away from some of their stubborn beliefs -- or at least, their stubbornness to look away from the truth.
Eliam is incredibly kind to sympathize with Cio, and oh--Luciel!! That would be such a sweet union ❤️ I do suspect Alessi will he very unkind to Eilam... but their mercy will be very surprising!
They most definitely take after Nero, who keeps his affairs away from mortals, and is fiercely loyal and protective to the things and people he cares about!
I think the conflict will then be doubly interesting for Eilam. I wanted there to be a conflict between wanting to stay loyal to your friends and family, and yet having to do that at the cost of potentially wronging the Universe and humanity.
Thank you so much again for telling me❤️❤️ it's incredible valuable to know about other people's MCs so I can tailor and keep in mind what dialogue choices to include to accommodate different personalities!
It's ok. Thanks for your thoughts. I find it hard to really roleplay and get into the mind of a character without having an idea of what my character is going to ultimately be. I'm not the self-insert type, so I love to flesh out a MC that has an initial format that can grow and develop with the story I've put them in. Eilam started out as my idea of a very wise but misunderstood God with a kind heart, who'd probably hang his head and stick to the wall like a typical wallflower. However...as your story went on...he became a bit more proud and his job in the underworld just reminded me of my retail job days. Thus...he now has a bit of that harsh cynical nature you tend to develop when you work retail jobs for to long. (anyone who's worked retail will understand the pain of dealing with idiots and entitled assholes)
I also love the idea of the God of Eternity and the God of Death as a pair. Leave it to a God of Eternity to have zero fear of a God of Death. Even though around Luciel, Eliam becomes less introvert and more simp. (Luciel deserves someone to love and be loved. Not being alone at a table during a feast. I wonder what the child of Death and Eternity would be...... Fate? Destiny? Rebirth? Probably Rebirth. Could be all three.)
Luciel: Wait...we're already talking children? o_o
Eliam: At least three! <3
And Eliam having this vast library like knowledge in his head, like the personal history recorder of the universe itself. I wanted to make him a fighter because he's definitely the protective type, but Perception and Knowledge were just to perfect for a God of Eternity. Somehow Eliam went from a kicked puppy in my mind to a prissy black cat that will hiss if you poke him the wrong way. But I like it. I'm looking forward to future development
Final thoughts...I totally adore his dads. And from the sounds of it, Alessi and Eliam are going to be like two stubborn cats fighting over floor space. He won't back down from kicking her ass...and seems like neither will she. Thus...I suspect we've got a good ol' fashion rivalry/frienemy relationship in the future here.
Sorry for another rant. I've always loved mythology, so I can get passionate when it comes to this sort of thing. xD
This demo is (pardon my french) absolutely fucking gorgeous. And not just the aesthetics- though the ui is probably some of the prettiest I've seen on twine. The beauty pervades even the text itself; the writing is lyrical and flowing, yet clear and crisp. If I had to use one word to describe the writing style of Uroboros, it would be ethereal. It is dreamlike, as though you're walking through someone else's hazy recollections. Yet, the text always manages to remain sharp and focused, never losing sight of the plot. The writing is always so easy to visualize, at a mere whim bringing in images of decadent halls and the shimmering night sky to the forefront of the readers mind.
And the choices. The sheer depth of choices we have, this early on, makes me squeal with glee and clap my hands with joy. There's such a wide range to choose from, allowing the mc to spring to life fully realized. MC isn't shoveled into an archetype, but instead is allowed to roam the world, feeling out each and every interaction they have. And you're never penalized by the game for choosing the "wrong" option whatsoever. If you want to be mean, be mean. If you want to be kind yet bitter (my MC, thanks for asking) you have the freedom to do so! Any combination under the sun is possible, and the game won't lock you out for having the 'wrong' mc.
And the relationships we can have with the characters also makes me giggle and clap my hands like a toddler in a candy shop. There's no relationship points or values or anything like that; instead, you can craft your relationship with each character as you see fit, letting the game keep track of your attitudes and mannerisms. As another commenter said, there's no need to second guess whether declining a piece of bread will lead to a decreased relationship- this game says, 'fuck that!', and lets you decline the damned bread without losing anything whatsoever to the relationship. You can create actual, meaningful relationships in this game without agonizing over being stuck in Route Lock Hell.
I know that so far I've written what may amount to a whole ass essay, but this wouldn't be complete if I didn't have a whole mini rant about my wonderful little MC, Roselle the Imperishable, The Universal Eye, All Who Lasts Forever. (Whoo writing that was a dozy.) Kindhearted and outgoing, yet tactful and courteous; ever curious and open, yet keeps their secrets close to their chest. Charming, thoughtful, caring- they're a well of contradictions. When they were born, they were bathed in love from the Universe. Yet, after being cast aside by the gods, after being ridiculed and thought of as lesser, they now doubt the Universe's love towards them. It must all be a ruse, because how could this count as love?
They're pretty curious about everything- about how the wind flows, about the way the water laps against the beach, and most of all, about humans. They've studied human anatomy extensively, and was more than a little excited to dance with the humans at the festival! Yet, despite having a job that allows them to speak to humans on the daily, they, well...they hate it. They never let that show though; instead they go about their duties with their head held high, dutiful to their task. They would much rather travel and see the world, but for now they will stay in the afterlife, guiding souls to their destination. What good were they worth outside of this?
Roselle, while they are kind and loving, also has a well of bitterness inside of them that they try not to acknowledge, yet always manages to rise up unbidden. They love their fathers, yet in the same breath loathe the two for bringing them into the world, worthless and then tossed aside. They loathe Salvatore, due to pure jealousy. Salvatore, the miracle, the golden child, the beloved. They always attempt to act civil around her, and know that their loathing isn't justified, yet they loathe anyways.
One of the only deities that is uniformly on their good side, however, is Lucille, above all grateful to xem for giving them a chance when no one else would. Ciocana is amusing, funny and playful, yet also a (potential) friend in the making- outcasts are drawn to other outcasts, after all. And they are definitely looking at Alessi (and may help out with the rebellion. Idk, whichever route proves to be the most chaotic...cackling like a witch rn).
Now as this long winded rant falls to an end, I merely want to re-iterate my thoughts on this game: it's really fucking good. Like, really. Play it, replay it, and bask in the wealth of choices and the beautiful writing. Meanwhile, I will be banging my hands over and over again, waiting for chapter 2. Thank you so much author for making this incredible game!
Over the Moon,
You have no idea how many times I've read reread your comment. There is nothing more inspiring and beautiful to me than someone who receives your labor of love with so much love, too. Being able to resonate with someone is the impact that I've always dreamed to have, if there's one thing I must do; in a way, that's true eternity.
I'm so glad you could see what I was aiming for with the writing style! Simultaneously hazy, yet clear -- a waking dream, as said in the prologue. I can't even state my ecstasy in at least succeeding convey the way I wish my writing is read, even for just one person!
I've always found that one of the issues I had with IFs is having to play to fit a certain archetype perfectly. Sometimes, it feels like they punish me for responding differently than how I've characterized my MC until that point. That's not something I want to penalize people for, but rather reward -- to give them nuance, and not lock them out of options unless it's jarring or wildly illogical. I'm so happy you're really enjoying the depth of the choices so far, and I hope to continue that trend in the next chapters!!
Of course, another issue I found in other IFs is needing to say the perfect words, the perfect choices to gain the approval of my chosen romantic options. It's difficult to work with, because on one hand, I want to please the characters -- and yet, changing my character to fit the RO also feels like the RO can't love them honestly. This time around, I simply want to acknowledge MCs who agree and MCs who disagree with them. I also can't help myself, since I love opposites attract!
Thank you so much for telling me about Roselle. Learning about other people's MCs is truly valuable information. It helps give me insight as to what matters to readers and their deities of eternity, and that helps me mold the IF's choices and direction much better to cater to both you guys and myself! I especially hope to cater to MCs with as much nuance as Roselle, who can be sweet and lovely, and yet bitter and jealous (rightfully or not so rightfully).
I can't even begin to explain how emotional this comment made me. Again, there is no higher honor than being seen. I can only hope to show it by hopefully marching your energy, which is why I delayed writing until I feel I could give a response that could do my feelings justice. Even now, it still doesn't feel enough -- and yet it'll have to do. You've singlehandedly forced me to write today, even for just a few minutes, because I desperately want to write the story that you say it is -- that someone could love as much as I do. ❤️❤️
Thank you again, Over the Moon! 💕 :)
Oh. Em. GEE!!! This game is so. Freaking. COOL!!!! Hellooo, there are GODS in here, like you're playing a literal god. You're useless but you still get to bully dead humans so I enjoyed it. There are also other gods that are Cute like the sunshine god. Have yuo ever seen that teletubbies baby face in the sun, that's what I mentally imagine them to look like (I kno there are drawings showing what they look like but I like to be using my IMAGINATION!!!!) There's also boss mommie god and daddy gods which I much liked. The writing is freaking great it has this whimsical tone which goes with the setting and you really feel like you are a god, but like a useless one. The demo ended in a cliffhanger so I'm a little bit angry thinking of complaining abt that. But it's still so yummy I think I won't and I look forward to reading MORE!!!!
(This was a silly little joke but my love for this game is not. I can't describe the experience of reading it in just words, but believe me when I say that it's well worth it. The whimsical, magical feeling that the writing inspires really helps to paint the world and unique situation you find yourself in as the god of eternity. There is so much freedom given with how you're allowed to interpret this story, to the point where some instances have completely different choices depending on how you've felt about something previously. You wouldn't realize it if you only play through it once, but gems like that just goes to show how much effort the author has put into making this as personal of an experience as possible, despite the fantastical setting. The only complaint I have is that I want more </3)
I FREAKING CHOKED ON MY WATER WHILE READING YOUR COMMENT 💀
If I die and become a useless god, it's on you! (Jk)😭⚰️
SDIFGJKLDFG TELETUBBIES BABY FACE?! 😭😭😭 well,. ,, , all the more power to you and your vivid imagination blablabuble,,,,,, don't cook again 🗣️🗣️💯💯🔥🔥
In any case, thank you so much for your compliments 🥺🥺 I know I asked you to do this as a joke, but I'm so glad that you wrote such genuinely nice things for it as well!! I truly write this for you and the others, and I hope that love comes across. The choices I made for this IF are defined by how much I wish this IF to be so personal to the audience and the people I care about.
Thank you so much again for humoring me.......... Carl 💕💕
A staggering amount of personality variations that allows you to cook up the most complex and interesting MCs your little heart could ever dream of. Angry Wet Cat (read: tsundere) options are very much available and readily received by the world within the game, so one can live their tsundere MC dreams to the fullest without having to worry about getting 34785 negative relationship points along the way. MCs intent on being the meanest, most ruthless piece of ice in the general vicinity are also welcomed.
Favorability meters? Relationship points? They don't exist here. Choices actually bounce off of non-MC characters to create interesting relationship dynamics instead of kicking you into Route Lock Jail. Unless you say something that's extremely opposed to their core morals, you're fine. The game won't kick you out for being mean, promise <3 Go wild with the variables. Be free.
And, no. You don't get negative relationship points for refusing a piece of bread. There are no relationship points. The game tracks the attitudes, opinions, and actions you express to the characters and bounces off of that. Refuse that bread. They won't mind. This is a safe space for bread haters. More bread for me, at least 😌🍞✨
— (If I sound a bit unhinged, I'm sorry <//3 this is a personal blurb I wrote for Uroboros while I was working on making actual different collections for my beloved IF games instead of tossing them all into one collection 💀 I figured I should post it here as well.)
Aspen, thank you again for such extensive praise!! 😭😭 I will work even harder to make sure that what you say is fully true in the next upcoming chapters — I want to accommodate even the wettest and angriest cat MC ❤️❤️ there is so much more to people than arbitrary dialogue choices you make and small decisions that largely don't matter in the long run. I've personally struggled so much to always say the right things so that my RO won't hate me, and that's an anxiety I definitely don't hope to encourage in readers for my IF!
I'm really glad you tok the time to recognize that! The SAFEST space for bread haters :) thank you so much for dropping this comment even though it was meant for your collection! (PS I totally checked it out!!)
I absolutely adore this, you do not even understand the extent of how much I love this.
The customization is awesome, being able to choose multiple pronouns & even change forms as we please is just so amazing I adore that.
The complexity of the choices & characters & how its not just superficial stats, which, I enjoy stat based games, but this is refreshing to say the least & it makes everything feel so much more real.
I love being able to choose if my character likes being touched as well, the amount of customization is just awesome.
The setting & little clues we get on the lore & the way it was executed, it all just makes this an amazing experience, even with only one chapter out.
I feel like I will become addicted to this game.
Edit: Before I forget, In profile, after ‘as befits’ rather than showing the pronoun it shows $mc_their
Angie,
Thank you so much for your kind words!! I am so glad that you enjoyed the level of customization and the choices so much—what you're saying is what I strive to achieve, and while I can't say myself if I deserve your high praise... I'd love to be worthy of it and be confident of saying as much as well someday! ;O;
I will check into that bug, and again, thank you so much!!! This means the absolute world to me <3
saw luciel and immediately had to play this game. and now look where i am. writing fanfiction. oh my god.... ten minutes until i write more luciel fics amen. see you on discord 🫡
(on a different note. i love this game!! first one i've played and it's really fun! :D)
Oh Desatana, hi phobia!! 🥺🥺 I'm glad you like Luciel's portrait so much, and I loved your writing too!!! See you on Discord, and thanks so much for commenting and sending your love! 💕
i promise i'll write more when i see something that catches my eye!!! i've been wanting to try my hand at writing my mc + luciel
amen 🫡
Your writing is so fantastic. I absolutely love the amount of choices available to us for building our characters, not just superficial appearance choices, but actual personality choices! That feels so rare in IF. I also saw you mentioned you can be on good terms with the characters even if you disagree with them, that made me so happy! I'm always so excited to find a good story with choices and character interactions that don't rely heavily on stats.
Can't wait to read more of this ❤️
🥺🥺🫂💕 Thank you so much for all your kind words, melkhiresa! I get emotional reading your comment because you say exactly what I hope to hear about the IF! You remind me that there are people see and acknowledge the small details, and that truly inspires me to keep holding myself to a high standard. I want to keep putting out work that makes you feel this way! Again, thank you so much for your kindness 🫶✨
Absolutely amazing!!! Can't wait for the part 2! 😭💗
Also, I already have my eyes set on Luciel 😳👀
I'm crazy for already making up cute scenes between my character and Luciel. 😭
😭😭 Thank you so much!! And you are absolutely not crazy at all... I'd love to hear them if you ever want to share them! Thank you so much for enjoying this 💕💕
This is absolutely beautiful, it’s way different from any other game I played. I can’t wait for the next chapter and keep up the amazing work!! ❤️
🥹🥹💕 I am so glad to hear you liked it!! I am so interested in what you think is different about it! I hope you'll continue to follow its development 🫶
I think it’s different bc the writing is phenomenal, I felt so immersed and the designs were all so beautiful!! The characters also had so much thought into them, it’s not everyday you find stories like this!I’m so excited to see the rest of the story! I will definitely follow its development!! ❤️
Also I love your interaction with your fans!! It’s so nice that you reply back to all of us!! Very sweet 💞
🥹... It feels weird to call you guys fans. I feel honored to be given the chance to be read and known, which is the most wonderful thing to ever happen to an author. Instead, I feel indebted to everyone who's given my story a chance and invested their time and effort into reading it.
Thank you so much for explaining 💕 while I feel I don't deserve such high praise, I trust that you mean it, and that means the world to me. Thank you so so much for giving me your kind words!!
I don't know what to say. Everything about this game is so beautiful. From how the story flows to pretty designs (the art is so PRETTY and the descriptions are so well detailed). I really love the interactions of the MC with the characters, and Its so well written that I want more of it 😭💗 Thank you for making this! Good luck on the upcoming updates.
GreenGummyFrog, you have similarly put me at a loss for words 😭💕 thank you so much for giving this game a try, and for liking the writing and design I worked hard for! I can't tell you how amazing and profound it is to be seen. I hope you will follow the next updates!! 🫶
Beautiful, beautiful game. The visuals, the writing, the characters — so many aspects of this game come together to create an incredibly immersive experience. The amount of variations available for the player are insane, and makes so much room for you to create complex and vivid MCs. 5 stars, 10/10, and I hope new readers will have as much fun as I am!
Aspen, thank you so so much for your kind words, it means the world to me!! 💕💕 I've rewritten this comment a few times, but I can never quite convey my appreciation in any way that expresses the full breadth of it. Even if I can't hope to show it properly, I've been, and am, extremely grateful for all the support you've given me so far. It's truly astounding. Again, thank you so much :)
Cause I'm not sure the best way to contact the creator about the website, I'll do it here. Salvatore's and Luciel's Heart/Personality section is the exact same, looks like Salvatore's was accidently copied straight up from Luciel's.
Thanks for letting me know Fizel <3 I'll fix it! 💕
The artwork of the ROs is bloody ✨ gorgeous ✨...I can't take my eyes off it 🫡
🥺💕 I love the portraits so much, too! Thank you so much :)
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